Courswork Construction: Audience feeback of rough cut

After showing some friends and family the rough cut of my coursework I was given some feedback:

Positives;

• Interesting concept
• A range of shots
• Cool lighting in the parts where he was trapped in the screen
• Appropriate to target audience

Negatives:

• No title/titles
• Music doesn't fit very well
• Bumpy transitions between shots
• Not completely clear what is going on

Changes to make upon feedback:

• Add titles
• Add some video effects to make the transitions smoother
• Edit the music and sound to make it fir the opening better
• Film some extra cutaways of the back of the computer to add in during the shots where he is trapped inside the computer, to make it more clear what the plotline is.